Process Conclusions Conciseness Verbs Data Conventions	3.8 Collapse plodding explanations
	Join together step-by-step explanations into quicker sweeps of ideas. Many concepts are better stated in healthy-size sentences, not overlong ones, but sentences that include considerable information. Such sentences are particularly useful for information that is neither emphatic nor persuasive, but that simply must be included. Examples I sent Billy the letter about the new procedures. He responded by saying that we had forgotten about consulting Jill. I wrote to Jill but she never responded. So I had Billy give me the go-ahead. Then I published the procedures on the intranet. The purpose of this last step was to give the Finance Department a general sense of where we were headed. Rewrite: After consulting Billy, trying to get Jill's approval, and receiving Billy's approval, I published the procedures on the intranet to give the Finance Department an idea of where we were headed.
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